...sometimes I really do think I hate you. Beautiful. Lovely. Deep. Meaningful. Only problem is with the second stanza, did you mean to make that a 'your'? It doesn't make sense...gramatically or poetically (at least to me). That's it. Short, sweet, almost perfect. Bastard.
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Thought I owed you a proper crit, since you obviously have enough talent to drown all of us...not that that a bad thing...it's all good all good.
so here it goes
hope it helps.
ARAGH how dare the!
It brings images to mind..... and as I said Brad, I'm sre you're tired of the OH WOW I LOVED IT SO MUCH AMAZING crap from me so I'll just sit here and stare at it till I can think of something "mature enough" for your particular liking my good sir... :stares:
i liked it but it was a little short but still a good poem
There isn't much to say... in case you want to hear it again... good job.
I hated it. No, really. :^o 8-[
Regardless of the finesse, however, it kind of struck me as being...pointless - and the last stanza was too abrupt for my tastes.
But maybe thats just me.
how can you do that in three stanzas?
do you even need critiques?